In a character introduction, the name of the character is stated first. The description of the character follows
the name. The character's name is written in capital letters the first time it appears and before the character speaks for the first time.
KELLY BRANDT clutches her camera as she pushes through a crowd of people who are gaping with shocked expressions at flames leaping from a nearby building. KELLY's stark beauty and intense blue eyes are
illuminated in the firelight as she presses forward, determined to get her first story assignment on the front page of tomorrow's Daily Gazette.
In the character description of Kelly, her age
isn't specified. But the description of her beauty, her eyes, the way she moves with determination, and the fact that this is her first story assignment provide clues that she's young. When Kelly "pushes through a
crowd," we learn that she's assertive and ambitious. Kelly's personality characteristics are defined by her actions here, as well as by the physical description of her.
It takes only a few sentences to describe a
character. But keep in mind that you need to carefully choose the descriptive words
that best define the character and his or her personality.
Down the street, ALLEN MARSHALL steps out of his jeep.
ALLEN is thirty-two years old, unshaven, dressed in faded jeans, T-shirt, boots, and a cap emblazoned with WBBD Radio. He moves with long, confident steps toward the crowd and the burning building.
In the description of Allen, his age is stated. The way Allen is dressed and the fact that he is unshaven tells us a great deal about him. Also, he's driving a jeepanother expression of personality. We can
see that Allen is defiant, cares little about what others think of his appearance, and is very confident, which he expresses in the way he walks. The cap he's wearing provides clues about his job and complements his
personality. The jeep fits in well with Allen's unshaven face, his faded jeans, and his boots.